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  • ahlamghailan
  • Nov 25, 2021
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Updated: Mar 2, 2022

UNIT 2 IDENTITY

Target grade: 5

 
 
 

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ahlamghailan
Apr 19, 2022

Artist 1:

- Redraft your photoshoot plan using the questions from my website: http://msburleyphotography.weebly.com/uploads/1/1/9/8/119822253/112667955.jpg

- Further annotation for your contact sheets, see exemplar: http://identitymyshamaeruli.weebly.com/

- Further annotation for your developments (see exemplar above)

- See me in class to support your developments for your first artist draft 1 (B&W)


Overall you need to focus on your annotation for your first artist, demonstrating your annotation of your artist, your intentions and your understanding of photographic terminology.



Artist 2:

- Missing annotations for further developments

- Experiment with double exposure using your redraft developments of Uma (add these as further developments)


Artist 3:

- Further detail for development annotation using photographic terminology 'tier 3' language


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Holland Park School OBU
Holland Park School OBU
Mar 03, 2022

Artist 1:

- Redraft your photoshoot plan using the questions from my website: http://msburleyphotography.weebly.com/uploads/1/1/9/8/119822253/112667955.jpg

- Further annotation for your contact sheets, see exemplar: http://identitymyshamaeruli.weebly.com/

- Further annotation for your developments (see exemplar above)

- See me in class to support your developments for your first artist draft 1 (B&W)


Overall you need to focus on your annotation for your first artist, demonstrating your annotation of your artist, your intentions and your understanding of photographic terminology.


Artist 2:

- Missing further developments and annotation

- Experiment with double exposure using your refraft developments of Uma (add these as further developments)


Artist 3:

- Further detail for development annotation using photographic terminology 'tier 3' language

- Experiment with double exposure


Could we…


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Holland Park School OBU
Holland Park School OBU
Feb 11, 2022

Ahlam, you have some stunning work in your portfolio Ahlam. Your recording ability has improved greatly through the year which is excellent to see. I would like to focus on your annotations over the half term to ensure that you are discussing your intentions for the developments, how they link to your artist, what you could have done better and what you will do next.


Grade 5/6

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Holland Park School OBU
Holland Park School OBU
Feb 11, 2022

Exemplar portfolio: http://sanemgoldalidentity.weebly.com/final-piece-ideas.html

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Holland Park School OBU
Holland Park School OBU
Dec 07, 2021

I can see a great deal of progress in your understanding of visual language and the presentation of your website which is excellent to see. Your images show a consistent link to your artist and you are emerging in your ability to edit in the style of your artist. To develop, print out your images and pour water over them to further distort and alter them. You can also print your images and recapture them over a glass to abstract the images further.


Make sure that there is a noticable difference between the 1st and 2nd draft to develop your work further.


Your AO1 is growing in confidence but could be refined further. Consider the deeper meaning behind the work,…


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ahlamghailan
Dec 07, 2021
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Thank you miss I will insure that I develop my images further by experimenting with water and I will also consider to make sure there is a difference between my first and second pieces of work.

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