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  • Writer: Rita Bllaca
    Rita Bllaca
  • Dec 16, 2021
  • 1 min read

Unit 2 Identity

 
 
 

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Holland Park School OBU
Holland Park School OBU
17 may 2022

http://sophiekhoushpeymanidentity.weebly.com/chloe-sheppard.html

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Holland Park School OBU
Holland Park School OBU
23 feb 2022

Rita, I can see there is some development and growing understanding of the concepts and themes surrounding your work but currently this is under developed. At the moment, there is a lack of coherency in your work and jumps from one idea to the next without considering of why this is the case. Consider the wider themes in your work - what are you looking at? Why are you exploring this?


I would like you to redraft your further developments for your first artist - perhaps these could be a physical collage and then I can scan it? Could you also capture a new photoshoot for your first artist similar to this: https://www.pinterest.co.uk/pin/99290366774229533/


For your final piece, I would like…


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Holland Park School OBU
Holland Park School OBU
09 feb 2022
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Holland Park School OBU
Holland Park School OBU
09 feb 2022

Artist 1: At the moment, I think this is the weakest area of your portfolio and currently it is pulling your grade down as I would describe it as 'moderate ability' and if you are aiming for a 6/7, you need to aim for 'highly developed/consistent', rather than moderate. This is due to the edits lacking an understanding of visual language and seem more elementary in nature and would be described as superficial, unrefined, simplistic and tentative. To improve your first edit, I would like you to do the following tasks:


- View the pinterest board that I have created for you to help support your edits: https://www.pinterest.co.uk/MsburleyHPS/rita-artist-1/


- I have printed off your collages images for you so you…


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Rita Bllaca
Rita Bllaca
09 feb 2022
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Hi miss,

I am planning on developing my first artist further and capturing images of my collaging with objects like lipstick and lip-gloss. I found it very difficult to grasp the composition of my first artist and I will try and develop it further.

I am planning on writing a small paragraph on each artist and how they link to my concept of youth culture after I have finished with most of my website. I am hoping that by doing this it will allow you to understand the meaning behind why I have chosen this artist and how I think it links to youth. Over the half term break, I am also planning on finishing of all my annotations for…

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Holland Park School OBU
Holland Park School OBU
03 feb 2022

Rita, please make sure to add your feedback page so I can offer feedback. You were meant to end this at the end of November, ready to get marked!


- Print off physical collages and layer objects on top (scan and photograph)

- Print imagery from second photoshoot and collage (same process as first artist). Scan imagery and then collage on Photoshop.


Please catch up with ALL annotation for second artist.


Third artist:

https://www.behance.net/gallery/57141869/The-Art-Of-Looking-Fault-Magazine


Independent study: Purchase disposable camera to capture portraits over the weekend in the style of artist 1 & 2.


Grade: 5/6

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Rita Bllaca
Rita Bllaca
03 feb 2022
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Hi miss, I will be sure to experiment more in my work and my photographers .

I have looked at some photographers that incorporate both digital and physical collage to their work but use film-like photography and I was wondering if I could do Zhamak Fullad as my third artist instead of the one you suggested?

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